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jenilees
Aug. 9th, 2012 02:19 am (UTC)
Seriously awesome! Great post-apocalyptic world building but with some very tender, human moments to really make this a story about people, as much as about surviving. Great characters too, loved them all. I was sad to see it end.
nightrider101
Aug. 9th, 2012 09:14 pm (UTC)
Thanks so much! World building is a challenge for me, so I'm glad I managed to pull it off with this story.

Thanks again for reading. I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story.
tebtosca
Aug. 10th, 2012 08:57 pm (UTC)
I absolutely adored this, and it's one of my faves of this round! I'm not a huge apocafic person, but your world-building was so tight and well-done, and yet you focused mainly on the humanity of survival and the relationships that arise because of and in spite of it. I love every single character, and would read timestamps and back story about any of them. The ending was hopeful and quietly joyful, and that's hard to do in a fic where the entire cast can be dead at any minute lol

Fantastic job! ♥

(p.s. don't judge me for picturing Jensen with a thigh holster like future!Dean lol)
nightrider101
Aug. 11th, 2012 12:21 am (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm honored to receive such great feedback from a fantastic author such as yourself. :)

In the interest of full disclosure, I'm not a huge fan of apocafic because I usually find it too depressing, too brutal to enjoy. I'm so glad you were able to love all the characters. Each one of them brings their own talents and back story, and they're all so very brave. It was truly a pleasure to write this.

(thigh holsters are freakin' hot. I totally get it) XD
violetrose1922
Aug. 11th, 2012 04:18 am (UTC)
This was a great story. The action was really well done, as were the relationships you built between the characters. Even ones who were seemingly less important, were thoughtful interesting.

But of course, I loved your Jensen and Jared the most. They were so interesting and also so mysterious. I would love to know more about them, either before the events of this story or after.

I thought the ending was particularly well done, hopeful but also in keeping with the dire tone of the over all story. I really want them to beat the machines. Am I horribly greedy if I beg for more about these people?

Thanks so much for this.
nightrider101
Aug. 11th, 2012 04:32 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I had such a great time writing this. There was never a dull moment. :)

Am I horribly greedy if I beg for more about these people?

Of course not! I should warn you up front, though, I'm an incredibly slow writer. It took me nearly two years to write this story if that's any kind of indication.

Thanks again for the wonderful comment. I'm so happy you enjoyed the story!
trishabooms
Aug. 15th, 2012 05:20 pm (UTC)
Outstanding!
nightrider101
Aug. 15th, 2012 08:26 pm (UTC)
Thank you!
mementis
Aug. 17th, 2012 01:55 am (UTC)
Oh, bb, this was fantastic. Such an engaging read, with such vivid characters. I liked what you did with Chad here, of all people - I wasn't expecting that. But of course the boys, they were awesome. They made a lot of sense to me here, and I enjoyed the way they found their way to each other.

Great read :)
nightrider101
Aug. 18th, 2012 09:48 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much, hon! Your opinion means a great deal to me. :) Ha! Chad seems to be a fan favorite. I'm so glad! He was a lot of fun to write. They all were, actually. Group dynamics are something I like to explore with my longer stories. It keeps things interesting.

Thanks again for reading and being so supportive. Your enthusiasm means the world to me!
cassiopeia7
Aug. 20th, 2012 03:04 am (UTC)
This was amazing! Your world-building was fantastic, I loved the whole "Terminator" feel to the machines, the sense of desperation from the humans, the slow dance of trust between Jensen and Jared, and the moments of terror dotted throughout. (And I'll be honest -- up until the part where Jared witnessed Jensen's wounds from the machine battle, I'd begun to suspect that Jensen might be a machine himself. A really, really well-disguised one.)

Brilliant job. You did good. Really, really good.

But you know? I'd really love to know how Jensen brought down the BD, because that thing sounded like a monster. Must've been some battle royale -- will we ever find out what happened? Timestamp, maybe? Please? *puppy eyes*
nightrider101
Aug. 20th, 2012 10:03 pm (UTC)
You're the second person to mention the Jensen!machine theory. I hadn't even thought of that while writing this story. It's great to hear how the reader felt while reading, the different theories. :)

I had the scene with Jensen bringing down the machine partially written, but due to time constraints and my writing being slower than Christmas, I just didn't get there. I'm truly a painfully slow writer. Snails move faster than I do. I'm hoping to do a timestamp, though. There were several things I didn't get to that I'd still like to explore in the future.

Thank you so much for the generous review. I'm honestly flattered and awed by the response to my first solo BB effort. :)
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ladyelektra
Aug. 20th, 2012 07:30 pm (UTC)
I enjoyed the heck out of this! I kind of figured it would be more about fighting the machines, but your focus on the group and its dynamics and the day to day struggle to survive turned out to be even better. These characters were so fleshed out and real that I found myself wishing I could hang out with them (although maybe without the threat of death by machine, ha ha). The sense of loyalty and community and friendship was a wonderful thing, and your writing made that jump off the screen the entire way through. Even in such a terrible situation, with constant doubt about the future, there was an underlying bit of hope. You showed that it was possible to find happiness -- like Jared and Jensen's relationship and the pleasant surprise of Jared's sister popping up.

Thanks for sharing!
nightrider101
Aug. 20th, 2012 09:57 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I definitely didn't want the focus of the story to be the machines. I tried to convey the relationships that were carved out despite the war, not just because of it. :)

Is it bad that I would like to hang out with them, too? Definitely without the looming threat of the machines, though. I'm not nearly as brave as them. lol

Thanks again for the thoughtful review. I appreciate you taking the time to share your thoughts with me. That makes the whole process worth it.
beelikej
Aug. 26th, 2012 01:43 pm (UTC)
THIS. WAS. SO GOOD. Unf. Loved how grim this world is and that you didn't offer a solution or clear ending. From your notes I understand you didn't mean to end it like this, but to me it works with the feel of the story.
I like how rough and real it is and how Jensen held things together (himself and without intending to do so, the group). I also like that Jared wasn't afraid to confront him.
The action scene with Chris and Jensen bringing down a machine with the car was marvelous. At the same time I really appreciate that you didn't reveal how Jensen managed to destroy one on his own.
So yeah: great characterizations, awesome plot. Well done.
nightrider101
Aug. 26th, 2012 11:12 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm thrilled you thought the ending worked. I had prepared and partially plotted something more intense involving a battle with the machines, but it didn't happen. My writing tends to occur at a snail's pace. :)

At the same time I really appreciate that you didn't reveal how Jensen managed to destroy one on his own.

I think you're the minority there, but I appreciate hearing that. It's nice to know the story worked as it was.

Thanks again for the wonderful comment and lovely review. Your kind words mean the world to me. <3
oddlyspoken
Aug. 27th, 2012 02:21 am (UTC)
Loved reading this story, you sucked me right in from the beginning. Lots of great tension and characterisation for all the different players. Thank you so very much for sharing.
nightrider101
Aug. 27th, 2012 07:43 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I do enjoy having a large cast to play with when I'm writing a long story.

Thanks again for reading and commenting. <3
anifsemaj
Aug. 29th, 2012 03:14 am (UTC)
Very nice! I'd love to find out just how Jensen brought down the machine!
nightrider101
Aug. 30th, 2012 11:03 pm (UTC)
Thank you!

I'm still considering doing a timestamp regarding Jensen and the epic battle with the machine. We'll see what happens. :)
jodean80
Aug. 29th, 2012 07:34 pm (UTC)
One of the best stories this year.
Not my usual cup of tea but it was rec'd to me and I don't regret reading it.
Thanks for sharing.
nightrider101
Aug. 29th, 2012 11:21 pm (UTC)
Thanks for taking a chance on the story! I'm so happy you enjoyed it. :)
fallsslowly
Aug. 31st, 2012 03:42 am (UTC)
This was a terrific read, nicely balanced between bleak, gritty and optimistic.

Great use of words, your story flowed beautifully and created so many images in my head. I also really enjoyed your characters, both the camaraderie and the tensions, especially reluctant hero Jensen. You did a fantastic job of making him a charismatic and complicated figure when he could easily have come off looking like a two-dimensional action figure.

Thank you - I absolutely did not want this to end!
nightrider101
Sep. 1st, 2012 01:35 am (UTC)
Thank you so much for the lovely review! I'm thrilled you thought the story was nicely balanced. This story is completely different from what I've written in the past. It was exciting to get outside of my comfort zone. :)

Thanks again for reading and taking the time to leave such a nice comment!
blodyn1
Sep. 5th, 2012 01:06 pm (UTC)
Absolutely brilliant story!
I've only just got 'round to reading it and devoured every single bit in one go - I just couldn't stop reading!
Great characters and world building - I was totally 'into' the storyline throughout. I loved your writing style and the way that you combined the despair and desolation of the situation with the hope felt within the camp.
LOVED IT!
(p.s. Is it rude to ask for a sequel?!.....please!)
nightrider101
Sep. 5th, 2012 10:00 pm (UTC)
Thank you so much! I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story.

It's never rude to ask for a sequel. Although I must warn you: it took me two years to write this. If that's any indication of my writing speed, don't expect much for awhile. :)

Thanks again for the lovely comment!
marlowe78
Sep. 11th, 2012 08:37 pm (UTC)
This was absolutely amazing. This is what I hope for whenever I click on a bigbang-fic, this is all I want and need in a story.

Well-drawn characters that leave you with that little bit of secret, action, drama, love, sorrow (though refreshingly little of that ;-) ) and I could hug you for that ending. It leaves me with my own imagination, with my own ending in my head.

A very, very big Thumbs Up for this great story!!
nightrider101
Sep. 12th, 2012 10:14 pm (UTC)
Wow. Thank you so much for the lovely review. :) I've had a lot of requests for a sequel so I'm happy to hear you were happy with the way it ended. I didn't end where I had originally intended due to time constraints, but I'm still happy this worked.

Thanks again for reading and taking the time to leave a comment. <3
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masja_17
Sep. 11th, 2012 11:03 pm (UTC)
You built a terrible world here, but so awesome! The story did come across as really hopeful thou! Thank you!

<3
nightrider101
Sep. 12th, 2012 10:09 pm (UTC)
Thanks for reading and taking the time to leave a comment. I'm so happy you enjoyed the story!
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